Virgil's Daughter Intrigue

I think this piece is well written. By telling the story out of order, it daughter's sort of intrigue that wouldn't be as prominent if the story was told in a more straight forward fashion. Similarly, the organization of the piece was good as well. The story starts with one conversation about the murder with the killer, before moving onto a witness statement to establish partly what happened to the reader. We are then introduced to the victim as well as the motive through the death of Virgil's daughter. Finally, we are able to see the actual murder and get the final part of the confession that began the story.

While I did have a hard time understanding the first few paragraphs on my first read through, it isn't an actual problem for

the piece and is more a matter of me having a hard time with postmodern pieces. In fact, the only real part that might benefit from a little editing would be the death of Virgil's daughter. It wasn't bad, just made Virgil's motive a little bit confusing. When Virgil goes to clean the fish as his daughter dies, it makes it a little hard to believe that he loved his daughter so much that he would kill a man for having tried to replace the fishing line on his daughter's fishing pole. I am not saying that it should be removed, as it does show that Virgil may have been responsible, and has the potential for violence.

What I am suggesting is possibly have him establish that he thought she was simply acting out (depending on the age she was intended to be), that maybe she had a tendency to act that way when she was bored or upset and he had expected her to follow him. A parent who was willing to kill a man over his daughter's fishing pole just seems unlikely to not be worried that she is lying on the ground. In all though, the daughters death isn't a huge problem, it just stuck out as a bit inconsistent in the overall great piece.