Analysis Of The Cat's Cradle: The Great Gatsby

Providing a specific example immensely heightened my position while my improvements also made an effective use of sentence variety. This kind of writing (a persuasive essay) is relatively easy for me to write because I have strong opinions to express yet I’m happy to recognize the importance of every factor. For example, in this particular essay the prompt was to choose which truth (artistic, religious, or scientific) is the most important in the novel and since I clearly saw the religious and scientific to be stemmed from the artistic, the essay seemed to write itself. While evaluating my symbol of the Cat’s Cradle essay (possibly my new favorite book) I was particularly impressed with my revised introduction paragraph. While planning an

Scott Fitzgerald was no exception. Perhaps the fact that we are left to conjecture what the prompt will be before entering class is the origin of my uneasiness or maybe the fact that we have a time limit to crunch out as much as possible. Whatever it is, most CTA’s are not kind to me. With that being said, I made quite a bit of revisions to my original which had an abundance of small quotes that I decided was too excessive such as in this example:

“He uses similes such as the breeze that ‘blew curtains in at one end and out the other like pale frogs’ and that also made a shadow on the ‘wine-colored rug’ as ‘wind does on the sea’.”

This pattern of “over-quoting” was sadly consistent throughout this CTA as a fatal flaw. I believe the time pressure clouded my brain slightly and I had trouble finding the words, so I decided to take them right from the excerpt instead. To avoid this in my revisions I decided to paraphrase:

“He uses similes to compare the curtains that danced in response to the breeze to pale flags gliding back and forth caught in the wind. The shadow from the curtains on the wine colored rug is related to the image of wind on the