For the Final Portfolio Essay Revision, I decided to revise Module Two Essay, Intersectionality, in part because it is the one I received the lower grade and didn't fully understand what was ask of me. This time I understood the assignment a little bit better it was still confusing at time but I manage to fully embed myself in the process of the revision. Here is what I change to my Module Two Essay, the first step I took was read the assignment paper again to understand the entire idea behind the essay. I then read and re-read the essay repeatedly. I then read the advises Professor Kalter provided me with for all three drafts. I guided myself through her comments. When over the most comment issues first, structure, in the process of the
In the opening chapter of their book, Patricia Hill Collins and Sirma Bilge examine the meaning of intersectionality as they apply it to three distinct examples: the FIFA World Cup, a World Congress of Sociology, and the Brazilian festival of Latinidades. Intersectionality, as defined by the authors, refers to “a way of understanding and analyzing the complexity in the world, in people, and in human experiences.” Intersectionality is often used as an analytic tool to better understand the social and political needs of those whose lives are influenced by multiple intersecting identities (i.e. Black feminism is used to call attention to the specific needs of Black women). The idea of structural power is another key component of intersectionality discussed by Hill Collins and Bilge in the chapter. They argue that power is organized in four distinct, interconnected domains (interpersonal, disciplinary, cultural, and structural), and “operates by disciplining people in ways that put people’s lives on paths that makes some options seems viable and others out of reach.” This idea is outlined in the World Cup example as the authors discuss the “pay to play” ideology in soccer that disadvantages those with lower socioeconomic status. At the conclusion of their chapter, Hill Collins and Bilge outline six core ideas that tend to come up when using intersectionality as an analytic
The identities have tended to be divided into some different categories, such as gender, race, and class, and these sources have been judged in the different ways. In other words, the different determinant factors of the individuality have been considered separately, and these components have been regarded as a unrelated simple category. Under these points of view, however, it is hard to recognize the problems of interrelated individual component of the identity. Thus, to solve the disregarding crossover point, the new theory of the “intersectionality” are essential. This essay explores the key definition of the “intersectionality” from the viewpoint of gender studies, and how the concept is connected with the social system and individual identity
The way humans look externally and feel internally has been a barrier and the kernel to many of America’s social conflicts. Audre Lorde’s essay, “Eye to Eye: Black Women, Hatred, and Anger,” attempts to answer why Black women feel contempt among one another. It resonates that Black women, in lieu of their hatred for each other, should replace it by bonding together because they share the same experiences of being women and Black. In the essay titled, “Colorblind Intersectionality,” penned by, Devon W. Carbado seeks to expand the definition of “intersectionality,” which is a theory Professor Crenshaw initially introduced as a, “Drawing explicitly on Black feminist criticism,” (Carbado 811). Carbado is able to provide other forms of intersections by
The theory of intersectionality is a very important concept when analysing the many different obstacles an individual may face throughout their life time. It takes into consideration that an individual is identified by many different labels rather than by their gender alone. Through the analysis of historical texts and extensive knowledge of activists and authors on the topic, Hunter College women’s and Gender Studies collective and Joan Simalchik (2016) is able to provide insight on the importance of intersectionality in studying identity markers and social categories when considering the many obstacles an individual may face through relations of power and privilege, multiple identities, and intersections of oppression.
Intersectionality is a term used to describe a situation whereby an individual has multiple identities and as result, the person feels that he or she doesn’t belong to one community or another. Because of the many conflicts in an individual’s identities, he or she could be a victim of multiple threats of discrimination (Williams, 2017). The discrimination could be a result of race, gender, age, health and ethnicity among others. To give an example, a black transgender woman could be discriminated in the workplace because of being black and also because she is transgender. From an intersectionality perspective, the woman faces multiple threats of discrimination because of the overlapping identities of gender and race and therefore the transwoman faces a bigger struggle (Barber, 2017). Transwomen of color will most likely encounter prejudices in the form of homophobia, racism or sexism in many dimensions of their life. The perspective of intersectionality is not only applicable to women but it can also be applied to males. For example, a gay Latino man could be discriminated based on race because he is an immigrant into
The identities help what makes people’s individualities to stand out uniquely because of the American society’s individuality. Intersectionality is a term for the interconnected of
Growing up, it has never been difficult spotting me in a crowd. Just look for the brown blip in the sea of pallor and you have a 99% chance of picking me. In a city of Mary Smith’s and John Johnson’s, “Michaela Benyam Zewde” sticks out like a sore thumb. My pride in my Ethiopian-American heritage is a characteristic I refuse to keep hidden.
Over the course of the last few months I have been stepping back from my daily routine to observe in as wide a scope as possible, the endless number of things happening. As I mentioned earlier, for many years I made it a point to keep my spiritual life separate from my personal. Furthermore, the news seemed to be an endless meditation on negativity; draining to say the least. From where I stand now imposing that artificial separation between spiritual and person seem rather trite and juvenile, despite the fact that it was beneficial for a time.
While brainstorming the process essay, I realized my weaknesses and planned better how to strengthen them. I knew simple grammatical errors and transitions were two of the most important ones I needed to correct. So while thinking of my topics to include in my essay, I thought of how each of them connected. In what ways can I draw connections between the three of these topics? Through asking myself this question, I transitioned from the paragraph of agency background to volunteer work with a more satisfying flow (“The Civic Responsibility” 2). While it took me longer to draft this essay, it ended up being worth it in the long run. I felt more accomplished of this paper and when I received feedback that required me to change minimal things; I knew it was worth
Throughout the Mid-SEE I have written reflections on my writing and participated in group activities. I have received comments back from my peers and suggestions to help with revising my paper. With the help of my professor, Professor Church and my classmates, I was able to comprehend their suggestions to me to make my essay better and by revising my classmate’s essays, I was able to point out mistakes that I might have made in my essay, which made myself go back to my essay and check and see if I had mistakes that just flew by my eyes.
As I was looking back at my previous work I realized that my personal essay was my lowest grade. As I worked to revise this piece I realized the areas I can improve on. Some areas I could to work on, based of my personal essay was changing from past to present tense within my essay, my use of semicolons, and working on hooking the reader in my intro.
The modules I completed allowed me to know what needed to be worked on. The weaknesses I have were pointed out and provided areas to be improved. I learned tips on how to catch my errors, and there are simple ways to correct the errors. The most important skill is being able to make my writing stronger in general. However, there are some things I would like to see changed in the course. The beginning of the semester is new, and it is hard to sit down focused on one subject. Therefore, I think that the diagnostic essay should have extended time. It is a challenge to write at the normal English level in sixty minutes. There should be a day of just preplanning the essay to develop solid ideas for the essay. If there was more time to preplan then essays would have better topic sentences and better organization. That would result in less modules to be done throughout the semester. Also, that there should be more topic choices than just two options. I have a hard time writing about a topic that does not feel connected to me in anyway. Another, section could be added on punctuation. There is a usage on commas, but there could a usage added for question marks and other
Thankfully, the feedback I’ve received all throughout this course assisted me in understand my essays better because of all the corrections I’ve made throughout the course. The strengths and weakness will certainly do not mean I will not continue to write essay. It will actually, also make me further aware when writing a complex essay. Thanks to the fact, that I have been able to comprehend the mistake as well as the good material, for future essays I will surely not have the weaknesses I have now and stronger
I have learned so many things this year about the reading and writing process that I can’t wait to apply next year too! One of these items is the revision process in writing an essay. I have always done some sort of first draft, second draft type of thing, but I didn’t realize how important it is to look back at your final draft and make changes to that. I have learned this concept this year by doing the mandatory and optional revisions. This has showed me that nothing will be perfect and there will always be room to improve; that idea is something that I could apply to not only writing but to life. Furthermore, I learned about the importance of having a second pair of eyes look at my assignment. This is important to do because oftentimes they
B. My structure is not clear enough. Although there are topic sentences and conclusions, my structure is messy inside paragraph. Therefore, in next academic essay, I will list my structure of the whole essay and every paragraph before writing the first draft. In addition, I will optimize my structure when I am writing the essay to make the structure of essay fit in the content of essay.