Title: The title of this essay does well in capturing my attention however, a clever reference to “Hunter’s in The Snow” could help make it even more compelling. Overall, this is a great title but, it does feel like it only refers to the “Things They Carried”
Introduction: The introductory statement could use some revision, I feel it failed to infer into the text however, the rest of your introduction has a lot of potential. The main issue I noted with your introductory paragraph is the excessive use of first-person voice. A great place to refer to in the revision process is the Essay 2 prompt module, where the professor discourages the use of first person voice and provides an example.
Synopsis: The writer did an impressive job at providing an informative yet concise synopsis of both stories. However,
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The only issue I have is the use of first-person voice, which should be a straightforward fix.
Content: The content of this essay looks very promising for a draft, with adequate revision this essay has limitless potential. Secondly, I did note several MLA errors such as missing page headings, in-text citation errors, and various errors in the works cited page.
Development: This essay is highly entertaining and well thought out however, it's about half a page short of the minimum length requirements. I recommend outlining your essay once more and finding another main point to include as a body paragraph.
Organization: The organization of this was easy to follow and adequately supported the thesis of the text. However the body of the essay needs more information on the two stories.
Integrating Quotations: This essay does fairly well in integrating quotations from both stories. The only issue I could note was your quotation from “Hunters In The Snow” because it feels awkwardly integrated into your essay, unlike your first two
Often people are not what they seem. According to Roald Dahl, in “Lamb to the Slaughter,” “But there needn’t really be any fuss. I hope not anyway. It wouldn’t be very good for my job.” When in public Patrick Maloney was the doting husband, but when the doors hid outside eyes Patrick revealed his true feelings. He wanted a divorce. He wanted to ruin his wife and soon-to-be child, but without anyone knowing. Thought the passage, the tone is revealed as condescending. The way Mr. Maloney talks to his wife is as though she is a small and unknowing child.
John McPhee used similes throughout his essay “Under the Snow”. One of his similes was him describing how a researcher put the bear in a doughnut shape. It was to explain to the audience that the bear was wrapped around with room between her legs for the bear cubs to lay when they are in hibernation. He describes the movement of the bears and the bear cubs like clowns coming out of a compact car. The similes help the audience see how the moved and how they were placed after the researcher moved them.
Throughout “A&P” and “Gryphon” the two characters found themselves facing a challenge that they had never had to face before. Reading both of the stories has shown that although different adversities were represented in the books they both had challenges and reactions that were similar to each other as well as very different. Sammy’s was about a store called “A&P” where the manager confronted three girls in bathing suits and Sammy had to stand up for them. Tommy’s was about a unique substitute teacher who he quite enjoyed and his journey with her, and his defending her to the other kids when one of the children gets her fired. Together and separately these two dynamic characters make up these unique stories that ensnared their reader with their thoughts, adversity and heroic actions throughout the story.
works of literature have tremendous amounts of similarity especially in the characters. Each character is usually unique and symbolizes the quality of a person in the real world. But in both stories, each character was alike, they represented honor, loyalty, chivalry, strength and wisdom. Each character is faced with a difficult decision as well as a journey in which they have to determine how to save their own lives. Both these pieces of literatures are exquisite and extremely interesting in their own ways.
Both stories were insightful about the harsh reality of war. They give the reader a view of war. The pieces are filled with visuals and symbolism. I recommend to all readers. Has a true message in both works.
The short story Hunters in the Snow by Tobias Wolff depicts three men that go on a hunting trip that changes the course of their lives. Each character lies to himself to accept his actions in his life. Kenny, Frank, and Tub need to successfully fool themselves before they can deceive anyone else. Each of the men are immature and selfish. They don't realize how their decisions impact other people's lives. They justify their lies with their own insecurities about their lifestyles. Their lies impact the situations they encounter and change their lives forever.
My analysis over the development of my writing throughout this semester. I will assess many aspects of my experiences with English 1301 up to this point in the semester. I will explain the ways by which I have blossomed as a writer during this time. I will provide brief examples of my work to show what I am basing the evaluation of my writing on. What my conceptions of writing were, at the start of, the semester and compare it to what they are now. I will clarify how my work this semester reflects the concepts of writing and reading we have been working on and studying in class. I will tell about what and how particular reading assignments have been influential in my growth of creative ideas. Lastly, my interpretation of what it means to be a writer, and how my experiences this semester has influenced my opinion on writing.
...ave brings them out of their protective and secluded shells. In both stories the theme of oppression, one mental the other physical, resulting in a victory, one internal the other external, prove that with determination and a belief in a higher power you can survive any situation.
I would like to acknowledge those who where instrumental in helping me put this paper together. A special thanks goes out to my classmates and even more specifically my group members Benjamin Mickle, Andrew Wallace, and Jeffrey Sheely. From their advice in varying my sentence structure, to the pushing of more description, I was able to enhance my paper. Thank you all.
The struggles both characters face demonstrate character development and contribute to the themes of the stories. Both short stories prove to be literally effective in that they disclose the main themes at the outset of each story. Although the themes may alter over the course of the stories, they are clearly defined in their respective introductions.
I have reflected over my written prose of this past semester I have come to understand my strengths and weaknesses in my comments and short essays. I reviewed the goals of the course to understand how they a line with my abilities and future goals. My strength lies in in my ability for contextualization and critical thinking. My weaknesses are in my ability to write and frame an argument based on evidence within the text. The stated goals of the course helped me to outline my progress over the semester. However, for me, the most important part is my ability to move forward and better my written prose. In a review of this semester, I understand how I have progressed towards certain goals and how to move forward with my future goals in the semesters to come.
The second closed reading was an analysis of a relationship between characters from The Piano Lesson by August Wilson. In the first draft of this paper, my biggest problem was the thesis. I failed to truly argue a thesis. I stated one but did not elaborate on what I meant. This caused my analysis to be vague and not arguable. It also made it difficult for me to connect my each paragraph to my thesis. The thesis is a very important part of an analysis paper and without it, it is difficult to form a well written
I will take the opportunity to improve in the areas I highlighted. To improve my use of references, I will make a list of potential references. I will then identify which references add value to my essay. After choosing what reference to use, I will check for reliability. I will provide enough information for the reader so that they can identify the source. According to The Simplest Way to Write an Essay “Find quotes from reputable sources that support what you’ve stated within your thesis and that relate to your first paragraph topic” (Hoyt). Using this information will help me eliminate unnecessary sources. I will also check my essay for uncited sources I may not be aware of, to prevent not crediting sources. To help with the transitions I will take more time about how I want to approach my
The summary assignment involved me looking for an article online that captured my attention. The Origin of a Movement was very accurate to what was going on in society today dealing with my race. I choose this article to reflect upon and summarize. Inside the paragraphs, I cited where I got my information from in the article. I also included properly