Discourse Example Of 'One Day A Boy Swimming'

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Discourse sample 2: The second discourse example was by Enrique whose short story was about a boy who went swimming and got ate by a great white shark. In his discourse sample, he began the story with “one day a boy swimming” which demonstrates that he knows how to correctly begin the story. He also introduces the audience to the little boy, revealing he is aware that there is a character in every story. Although, he is missing the auxiliary verb “went” to create “one day a boy went swimming” he understands that a story consists of a beginning, a character(s), coordinating conjunctions, and a setting. Throughout the story, he demonstrates his knowledge on pronouns because he introduced the character as a boy and referred back to the boy as “he” throughout the whole story. By him referring back to the character as “he”, he is also showing cohesion ties because he is maintaining the reference “he” to the same character. The student uses the coordinating conjunction “but” to join two different phrases “But he sow a grate wite shark. But he was very tiirt the shark ate him” the student uses the conjunction “but” to demonstrate that the boy saw a great white shark but he was too tired to keep swimming, so the shark ate him. In the example sentence, he is missing the conjunction “so” so it could have read “But …show more content…

Upon asking Luis what his intended meaning was that his favorite show was a cartoon about Star Wars. In his writing, it is evident that Luis has trouble with adjective clauses, often using the wrong relative pronoun in his sentence. A correct version of the sentence Luis wrote would be, “The cartoon that is about Star Wars is my favorite show”. Adjective clauses according to Folse, “describe or give more information about a noun” and need relative pronouns to identify in the clause (Folse 194).
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