In the beginning of my paper, on page two, it was suggested that I should have wrote “I will argue” instead of “it will be argued”. I do not agree with this suggestion as I feel that using a personal pronoun in the beginning of my paper would be inconsistent with the rest of my paper. As well, it was also suggested that I should have included the reason for why I chose my thesis. However, in my thesis it states clearly that I believe it is unethical for healthcare providers to interfere with competent patients and their rights to make decisions about their own medical treatments. Next, on the third page, when I state “However, this would eliminate patient choice regarding their care”, the grader wrote “this is a consequence -> Kant is concerned
Ramage, John D., John C. Bean, and June Johnson. Writing Arguments: A Rhetoric with Readings. 9th ed. Boston: Pearson Education, 2012. Print.
Before I started any essay in this class, I needed to find a question at issue. Finding a good question at issue means that it is arguable. Not an issue that no one would disagree with. Once a question at issue is established, I then come up with my enthymeme, which provides my claim and position to the question at issue. Following my claim is my because clause which states my reasoning. All three of my essays introduce the question at issue within the introductory. The introduction serves as foreshadowing of what my essay will be about and finally what I will be arguing. I introduced my enthymeme at the end of my introduction paragraph on all of my essays. In my first essay I address my question at issue by stating, “The photographer captures moments in time with hopes of these images having a positive influence on society” (Essay 1, 1) this raises a question at issue. Do photographs showing government interaction affect society ethical? After addressing this question at issue I moved right into my enthymeme to state my position backed by reason.
...reads this text, it will be clear to them that I care about and understand the topic Word ChoiceMy words are specific and correctly used so my readers will know exactly what I meanAll of my words and phrases are natural, effective, and appropriate; some of them are also memorable and powerful Sentence FluencyMy sentences are put together well and in a way that enhances the meaningI use a variety of sentence lengths and structures in my workWhen I read my work out loud, it flows well and has rhythm ConventionsI have reviewed my spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for correctnessMy grammar , paragraphing, and usage are correct and help me define my style while also communicating clearly PresentationThe formatting suits the purpose of the workI use the appropriate amount of white space on the pageI use appropriate fonts, font size, titles, and headingWord Count:
Philosophy is one’s oxygen. Its ubiquitous presence is continuously breathed in and vital to survival, yet its existence often goes unnoticed or is completely forgotten. Prussian philosopher Immanuel Kant was one of the many trees depositing this indispensable system of beliefs into the air. Philosophy is present in all aspects of society, no matter how prominent it may be. As Kant was a product of the Scientific Revolution in Europe, the use of reason was an underlying component in the entirety of his ideas. One of his main principles was that most human knowledge is derived from experience, but one also may rely on instinct to know about something before experiencing it. He also stated that an action is considered moral based on the motive behind it, not the action itself. Kant strongly believed that reason should dictate goodness and badness (McKay, 537). His philosophies are just as present in works of fiction as they are in reality. This is exemplified by Lord of the Flies, a fiction novel written by William Golding. The novel strongly focuses on the origins of evil, as well as ethics, specifically man’s treatment of animals and those around him. Kant’s philosophy is embedded in the thoughts and actions of Piggy, Ralph, Jack, and Simon throughout the novel. Kant’s beliefs also slither into “Snake,” a poem by D.H. Lawrence, focusing on the tainting of the pure human mind by societal pressures and injustices. Overall, both the poet in “Snake” and Piggy, Ralph, Jack, and Simon in Lord of the Flies showcase Immanuel Kant’s theories on ethics, reasoning, and nature.
The tone in your voice when you were talking about the rise in health risk was very academic and professional. This is one of the few points made in your essay where the credibility to back yourself up shone through.
1. The thesis of the essay is stated at the end of the first paragraph. The author says,
In the paper “The Price of Justice” the topic sentences are consistently inadequate and unclear. In order to have better developed paragraphs, the topic sentences need to be a solid, well thought out sentence that leads into the paragraph effectively. One way to improve the quality of a topic sentence is to ensure the paragraph follows and supports what the topic sentence is about. This can be done by creating a thorough outline of each paragraph and rereading each completed
In this essay, we were to evaluate the ideas proposed by the author. Isolating and analyzing the key claims within the text. This essay required us to provide justifications used by the author to support those claims and provide an analysis of the ideas. I chose a fictional text for this prompt called “The Things They Carried” by Tim O’Brien. The argument from this particular story is that everyone carries a burden. The justifications that I came up with to support this claim was Lt. Jimmy Cross’ strong infatuation with a girl named Martha and how all the soldiers carried some kind of burden, either physical or emotional. I needed to provide evidence to support these justifications. Some evidence I provided to back up the justification was how a soldier named Ted Lavender died on duty and how Lt. Cross blames himself for Ted’s death because he was concentrating more on Martha than his own crew. My feedback for this assignment wasn’t that good. I didn’t fully understand the prompt and that caused me to get a bad grade on the essay. The professor said my quotes were awkwardly used in this assignment and that I needed more cohesion between my thesis and the surrounding sentences. I noticed that I still need to work on my grammar techniques. One thing I did realize about my feedback was that I had less sentence fragments, so I count that as an improvement. It wasn’t required to make a revision memo
The introduction paragraph is confusing and ineffective. Opinions in the paper have unsupported conclusions with no examples to back them up. The paper is somewhat repetitive (example: sentence 1 and 5 from the introduction paragraph). Each subsequent paragraph after the introduction does focus on one idea. The paragraphs suffer from incomplete sentences, missing words, and conclusions that do not match given facts or assumptions. In paragraph two, sentence four it states that, “Obesity comes from eating junk food, in other words fast food.” However, junk food is not always fast food or vice versa. This is one of the assumptions made based on her opinion with no examples to support its validity. Due to illogical sequencing the given arguments lack coherence and focus making it necessary to re-reading passages. One such example is the third paragraph, fifth sentence. It states, “Physical education can be taken advantage of when required at a college student’s time.”
...ragraphs that support the argument. The easiest part of this component was actually inserting it in my essay after I understood the purpose for it, because at the beginning I was confused on the whole thesis concept. The thesis was the most challenging because I kept asking myself "Can I really argue this for five to six pages?" and also "Is this even considered a thesis statement?" I noticed that I can speak and write more effectively when I'm thinking critically and intellectually. My sentence structure has always been strong and I feel it has grown because of the practice we have had in class with finding thesis statements in our readings. My overall issue with this component of the writing process is using a justifiable argument and remembering to support my argument with claims and trying not to put unnecessary points in my paper while maintaining my ethos.
Immanuel Kant was a moral philosopher. His theory, better known as deontological theory, holds that intent, reason, rationality, and good will are motivating factors in the ethical decision making process. The purpose of this paper is to describe and explain major elements of his theory, its essential points, how it is used in the decision making process, and how it intersects with the teams values.
Kant's Categorical Imperative Deontology is the ethical view that some actions are morally forbidden or permitted, regardless of consequences. One of the most influential deontological philosophers in history is Immanuel Kant, who developed the idea of the Categorical Imperative. Kant believed that the only thing of intrinsic moral worth is good will. Kant says in his work Morality and Rationality “ The good will is not good because of what it affects or accomplishes or because of it’s adequacy to achieve some proposed end; it is good only because of it’s willingness, i.e., it is good of itself”.
By the time you are reading this I will be cringing at the thought of this essay. Not much to say here, but how embarrassing this is this for the person writing this essay. This isn’t a good paragraph, but I don’t care.
Thesis or argument (a position that can be reasonably opposed) A thesis is generally one or two sentences at the end of the introductory paragraph.
Ending a paragraph in my LEN I stated that “My hands became exclamation points to each of my claims as I was talking with gestures and owning the stage for myself”. That paragraph finished and I started the following one talking about what speech was about by saying “My speech was an argumentative speech about life in prison without parole for juveniles”. In hindsight I think it would have been helpful to tie those two paragraphs in. If I could go back now I would say something about the importance of owning the stage for persuasive and argumentative papers which would give me a smooth transition in to talking about my argumentative paper. Now that I see what could have been improved from older papers it is helpful to look at more recent works to see how far I have come as a