Goblin Culture In Barty's The Vignette

The vignette reads well and has a decent flow. The story is quick and both the narration and dialogue feel humorous. The reader is given glimpses of goblin culture operates in your world along with how the goblins think. The reader is thrown into the middle of things at the beginning, but you follow it up with decent explanation of what is going on as the story develops. Finally, I enjoyed how you gave enough details that the reader can figure out what went wrong, without needing to say that Barty fused all four goblins together. Although, the story makes me wonder what the consequences of fusing the four goblins together would be.

The story only provides explanation and exposition to the reader if and when it becomes relevant to the story

and only as much as needed. This a good way to convey information and avoid an info dump. However, there is one exception in the beginning, and it stands out especially since you avoid unnecessary detail later in the story. That is the start of the story when Barty reflects on the fact that the goblins live in an area named the Misty Mountains, and that he suspected the goblins took the name from a copy of the Hobbit. This is egregious not only because whether not the goblins stole the name for their mountain or not is not relevant to the story, and also because it seems strange that the main character would pause to muse on the origin of the mountain's name when, as the readers discover a paragraph or two later, he is in the middle of a tense discussion on what to do with four goblins who got their limbs torn apart. Other then that, there is not much to comment about, there are areas without much description, but there is decent descriptions where it really matters. Additionally, I didn’t notice any glaring grammatical issues that took me out of the story while reading it (although it never hurts to check).