Human Nature Thesis Statement

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Title: The title “Human Nature” does well at previewing the main content of the essay. Secondly, I felt the title immediately captured my attention and made me want to read your essay.

Introduction: The introductory statement of this essay did an even greater job than your title in captivating the reader's curiosity. The rest of your introductory paragraph did well in previewing the correlation you made between both stories.

Synopsis: This essay provides an extensive synopsis of both stories, featuring a myriad of vital information to enhance the reader's understanding of the stories. Secondly, the information you summarized, related directly to the points you were making.

Thesis Statement: The thesis statement of this paper was eloquently expressed, while giving the paper an overall sense of unity. You did very well in noting how the imagery in both stories …show more content…

Secondly, all of the MLA formatting appears to be accurate, except for the Works Cited page.

Development: I'm not sure how much better this essay can get, however with revision your paper can only improve. I found your use of outside sources to be both appropriate and as an inspiration for myself to find outside sources for my essay.

Organization: I was able to follow your organizational pattern and it is evident you have taken the time to thoroughly outline your essay. All I can say is that it never hurts to continue putting your essay through the revision process, since it is transparent that you have put serious effort into this assignment.

Integrating Quotations: Overall, the quotations utilized in this essay were very compelling in supporting the main points of the text. Next, you made excellent use of outside source, which is not always easy to do. The only thing I noted for revision is that you began two of your paragraphs with a quotation, instead of a topic

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