Gonzalo Rhetorical Analysis

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Gonzalo,
I like that you opened with a quote, I thought that was unique and think it really set the tone for the rest of your essay! I also like that although you are talking about racial issues and discrimination, you end on happier tones with hope for a better future.

1. Does the student writer include any questions for you to address? If so, please make sure that you respond to them.
No, there are questions asked in the essay but he answers them soon after asking.

2. What is the current diversity issue the student writer is addressing?
The essay is about racial issues.

3. What is the thesis of this essay? Where do you find it? Do you have suggestions for clarifying it?
The thesis is found in the first paragraph when he stats, “I decided to start reflecting my opinion about the topic of race.” He states the thesis of the essay very clearly in the beginning, letting the reader know immediately what the essay will be about. …show more content…

6. Do the paragraph divisions of the draft seem logical? Are there any paragraphs that seem to go in different directions?
I think a lot of the paragraphs that are broken up could be in the same paragraph, considering the topics seem to be similar. Examples of this are your first and second paragraphs and the fourth and fifth paragraphs. Overall, your paragraph breaks are good and stick to their topic, but I think the few I listed would make it flow better if put together.

7. The essay should not simply summarize different texts, but should use specific references to them to support the student writer’s observations, and should show how they relate to each other and to the overall purpose. How does this essay do this? Could it do so more

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