I’ve realized that I have been writing essays and papers for the majority of my life, and every time, I learn something new. Being able to connect multiple articles or books on a deeper level has made my understandings of the pieces better. However, in my first paper, I only had to connect a common theme within one short story. By doing this, I was able to find multiple examples of how the interaction of characters created a certain type of authority. Making the specific revisions to my paper helped me overall to create a more in depth analysis of the story instead of a summary. Finding a common theme throughout Ha Jin’s short story helped me find the examples that would demonstrate my thesis. I think that I was able to write well developed …show more content…
I find that I can be repetitive with some of my examples because I want to make sure my point clearly comes across. I fixed this throughout my paper and instead, wrote more of an analysis instead of stating my opinion. In the sentence “some people of higher classes interact with people of the lower classes”, I fixed it so it would be clear to the reader that I was talking about how people of different social rankings treat each other. Before I fixed the sentence, it was hard to understand the point of the example since the wording was …show more content…
I think that I was able to give the reader the insight that I was going to talk about inconsistent power figures in my introduction paragraph. I mentioned communism and how their idea of social equality was becoming more well known. Throughout the paper, I think I successfully talked about the unequal relationships between characters that went against the new ideals of communism. I was able to do this in my body paragraphs since I organized my paper in an outline so I could get my thoughts and ideas down on paper. By creating my rough draft outline, I found specific quotes from the short story that portrayed how different characters interacted with each other depending on how much they respected the other person. I found a quote from the story about how the chief treated Mr. Chiu when he was in custody. He blew his smoke into Mr. Chiu’s face, so I interpreted that as the chief having no respect for anyone below him since he did not care for his personal space. I think that I was able to elaborate well on my examples and provide a deeper meaning that connected with my overall thesis and the rest of my
Another revision technique that was suggested was “sentence outlining” which involves summarizing each paragraph of a writing into one overarching sentence in order to improve the cohesion of the piece (Harris 450). Introducing these techniques can allow readers to utilize revision in their own writing and form their own stance on its effectiveness. With revising the conclusion of a piece, Harris’ advise is to look ahead rather than to rephrase what has already been stated (Harris 454). Revision is expected to extend beyond the piece.
So is “Waxen Wings” a tragedy? No not at all, on the contrary, this short exposition is something to look at for inspiration. Ha Songnan clearly points out to never give up, even if it gives you obstacles that seem hard to face in life.Looking back, Birdie had difficult obstacles to get through in life to become a good gymnast, but that didn’t stopped Birdie, she kept on wanting to fly. This short story gives excellent use of Fractured Narrative,second person point of view ,and Imagery. All these components tied up to make a inspirational story about a little girl.
Thru-out the centuries, regardless of race or age, there has been dilemmas that identify a family’s thru union. In “Hangzhou” (1925), author Lang Samantha Chang illustrates the story of a Japanese family whose mother is trapped in her believes. While Alice Walker in her story of “Everyday Use” (1944) presents the readers with an African American family whose dilemma is mainly rotating around Dee’s ego, the narrator’s daughter. Although differing ethnicity, both families commonly share the attachment of a legacy, a tradition and the adaptation to a new generation. In desperation of surviving as a united family there are changes that they must submit to.
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In the poem "A Song of Changgan", It establishes with the speaker not wanting to be with her husband "And I lowered my head toward a dark corner; And would not turn to your thousand calls;" However, as she turns fifteen she considers that she has no other choice and grasps the fact that she loves him. "But at fifteen, I straightened my brows and laughed, Learning that no dust could ever seal our love, That even unto death I would await you by my post; And would never lose heart in the tower of silent watching." When the speaker turns sixteen, her husband sets off on a lengthy journey which made her worried as he hasn't come home for a while. "Your footprints by our door, where I had watched you go, Were hidden, every one of them, under green moss, Hidden under moss too deep to sweep away. "
The basic properties of a thesis statement is the subject, focus, claim, and the "So What?" factor. While I could pinpoint my subject and claim, I had a hard time with making my focus clear and understandable. In Paper 1, my starting thesis statement was "In Battle Royal, the narrator's status as an educated black man serves as a form of wealth; as a result, his wealth is sparking a need for more segregation and silence of the black man in an unequal and racist economy." This thesis statement was not a strong statement because it did not explain and elaborate why the narrator was truly "wealthy", which makes my focus unclear. To address this issue, I had to ask myself why my thesis sentence important to begin with and what did I want my thesis sentence to argue. To improve my thesis, I explained why his wealth was significant and added why my thesis statement was important to the audience. My final thesis statement was, "In Battle Royal, the narrator's status as an educated black man serves as a form of wealth because his education is an advantage he can use to advance in an unjust society; as a result, his wealth is sparking a need for more segregation and silence of the black man in an unequal and racist economy". This thesis statement is better because it pinpoints clearly why his wealth is even significant. Also, the second independent clause made my "So What?" claim clear because I could further elaborate on the broader significance of the
Writing is no easy task: transforming intricate ideas in your mind to coherent, limpid sentences is no simple feat. And even when you think you are finished with a piece of writing, you can always improve it. Which is why my analysis of The Wife Speaks by Elizabeth Stoddard, which I earned a 7 on, requires revisions on numerous aspects: my lengthy, garrulous thesis, and--most importantly--the analysis of the poem itself, which is cursory and superficial. Right off the bat, I noticed that my thesis, which comprises five-lines by itself, obscures my argument due to its incoherence.
Short stories are temporary portals to another world; there is a plethora of knowledge to learn from the scenario, and lies on top of that knowledge are simple morals. Langston Hughes writes in “Thank You Ma’m” the timeline of a single night in a slum neighborhood of an anonymous city. This “timeline” tells of the unfolding generosities that begin when a teenage boy fails an attempted robbery of Mrs. Jones. An annoyed bachelor on a British train listens to three children their aunt converse rather obnoxiously in Saki’s tale, “The Storyteller”. After a failed story attempt, the bachelor tries his hand at storytelling and gives a wonderfully satisfying, inappropriate story. These stories are laden with humor, but have, like all other stories, an underlying theme. Both themes of these stories are “implied,” and provide an excellent stage to compare and contrast a story on.
“Saboteur” written by Ha Jin is the beautiful depiction of the cruel but true image of our society. The story focuses on Mr. Chiu who was on his honeymoon with his wife. Everything was fine until they encounter the police. During his honeymoon he was concerned about his acute hepatitis and afraid of the relapse. But after he was arrested by the police for showing his attitude, although he had not done anything wrong, everything started worsen. His health starts deteriorating as he was not supplied with his medication and the unhealthy food of prison. The cruel circumstances make the innocent man as cruel and evil as it is. His decision of taking revenge on those policemen even worsens the situation that is represented on the last sentences
In my first draft for “Death Constant Beyond love”, my points were vague and seemed to be repeated in different parts of the paper which seemed that I had multiple statements. However, I did a deep analysis through my paper and located the key points of my ideas to create an outline that will drive the reader to only one conclusion, my thesis statement. In this essay I found my weakness but with hard work and multiple writing assignments I improved in a way that now I can focus in only one idea. For instance my thesis statement in this essay was contrasting as I wrote:
It was about using 3 sources to illuminate a particular aspect of my chosen play and to investigate some of the context of the work and to integrate the sources along with interpretation to address questions that arise in my reading of the work. My chosen play was “The Things They Carried” by Tim O 'Brien. First of of I had to come up with a question and I had to come up with a thesis that will answer the question. Before getting a review from the peer my thesis was this, “So, it can be argued that Lieutenant Jimmy Cross 's love for Martha was either a mistake or beneficial during the Vietnam war.” (Paper 3-Page 1) "Your thesis "So, it can be argued that Lieutenant Jimmy Cross 's love for Martha was either a mistake or beneficial during the Vietnam war" need to revise. You don 't need to mention argued in thesis, just need to prove it.”(Peer Review 3-Islam) I realized my peer was right, I had to write a thesis that will make the reader find out what the thesis is, I do not need to literary mention “this is the thesis”. After I change my thesis something like this, “While Jimmy Cross 's love for Martha brought his respite for the war and ultimately proved to be harmful to him, his men and his ability to be an effective leader.” This thesis seems more like stronger and arguments. Then I had to choose three secondary sources as an evidence. The part I struggled the most was finding the
Well-developed themes can be found when one analyzes the conflict of the short story; thus, the theme of the story is that some people are too ridden with guilt to notice the complacency of their life.
With theses, I never knew how to properly tie together my entire idea of the essay into a sentence or two. In my first essay titled
The short stories of Ted Chiang are written in a way such that the overarching structure help to give a deeper meaning to the stories. The rationale for why Chiang writes in this way is to help vary his writing style and help give the story more meaning without writing more words. Ted Chiang manipulates the structure of one of his works, “Story of Your Life,” for the purpose of augmenting the meaning the story and its underlying themes, while also using it to build a stronger relationship to the audience.
Through the story Jumpha shows the audience how they can relate with her through their own experiences. This really gets the readers attention and puts them in her situation.They are able to relate, as well as understand the complex language in which she is able to write her paper with.The story hardly goes into detail about how she grew up with problem coming from two cultures and how someone should act in a new culture. Along with the lacking background information from subject t...