Review Of Francescone's Paper 'Someday My Prince Will Come'

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Francescone’s paper, “Someday My Prince Will Come: The Impact on Fairytales in Print and Film over Time,” was filled with many clear points and grabbing details on the changes Disney has made to make fairytales more suitable for children and creating strong, female characters. This essay was very interesting to read and was filled with details; however, there were too many quotes and grammatical errors. Francescone has a strong hook in the introduction of her paper. She illustrates the experience of a young girl walking through Disney World for the first time (Francescone 1). Her descriptive language is immediately engaging and draws the reader to imagine their own experiences or connect with this young girls curiosity and overwhelming delight. …show more content…

However, there were a few mistakes that should be addressed with some of the author’s sources. When Francescone discusses the original version of The Little Mermaid, there was no source listed in the back of the paper that went with her in text citation (2). This was also the issue on page six. Francescone uses an in text citation for the author, Welter. However, there is no Welter listed in the Works Cited paper on the last page (6). There is also an issue with the authors in text citations. When repeating the same source in the next citation, there is not a need to put the same authors last name into the citation, there only needs to be the page number where the author obtained the information. This is repeated a few times throughout the paper, for example it occurs on both pages four and seven. Luckily, this is a very easy mistake to correct and will increase the legitimacy of this paper quickly. The majority of the author’s sources are academic and add value to the paper; however, there are a few movies listed on the work cited. If this paper didn’t involve an in-depth analysis of Disney movies, I would be concerned with how appropriate they are. For the context of this paper, the movies are integral and cited correctly and should be a part of the works cited …show more content…

It was similar to the opening paragraph and referenced similar points. The author ends her paper with a quote from Walt Disney. This was very fitting end to this paper because the concept about this paper was how Disney made strides to make fairytales appropriate for children (10). One thing the author could expand upon to make this an even better paper when considering grammar and mechanics, is to use a thesaurus and expand upon mundane and overused words. The paper itself is excellent and makes clear points, but with a richer vocabulary it would make the paper more enjoyable to read and increase its legitimacy. For example, instead of saying “They talk about honoring the family, which is a big deal in Chinese culture,” the author could rephrase that to say, “Honor is a crucial staple in Chinese culture that Disney addresses,” (8). The title of Francescone’s paper, “Someday My Prince Will Come: The Impact on Fairytales in Print and Film Over Time” is the perfect title for this paper. The phrase “Someday my prince will come,” is so recognizable and the reader will immediately know that this paper has something to do with Disney and princesses. The second half illustrates exactly what the paper focuses on and ties in well with the thesis statement. This also allows the reader to know what they will be reading about in a way that makes it inviting and exciting because it allows them to reminisce on their

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