Personal Reflection On Income Inequality

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I realized that where I needed to improve the most was in my own point of view. Instead of directly writing about my point of view I pulled in other sources (which I realized now was not what the assignment wanted) and used those sources to reflect my stance on the argument of income inequality, rather than bringing in personal experience. I was confused on first comment made on my essay, asking about how important the first two sentences of my introduction were for my introduction paragraph. Now I’m just a bit lost on how to adequately start my introduction, and I feel like in Paper 2 I made the same mistake of starting off with a few sentences that I believe are introducing the topic at hand, but may feel irrelevant to the reader. Or maybe I just needed to remove those sentences all together and not add anything new, overall I was just confused on what exactly I needed to do to my introduction paragraph to enhance it. …show more content…

For me, I found this aspect of my essay to be the most challenging to accomplish because I felt as though there was no clear way I could do this without using first person narration. I tend to avoid first person narration in my essays at all costs because especially at my high school, using first person narration was heavily looked down upon. But in this essay I subtle transitioned to my personal opinion and experiences in order to show a strong connection between my personal experience and the arguments I’m trying to make and

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