My Commas Flaws

The biggest problem I had was not using enough commas which lead me to have run on sentences and sentence fragments. I also had grammar errors like typing “acholic” instead of “alcoholic”. The remainder of my errors can have been solved if I had just re read the paragraph out loud saying things like “was born is Columbus” instead of “in”.
I can solve my comma error problem by simply going over the commas rules. I can also ask for help from the English teacher at Collegiate or go to the Academic Success Center at the college. If all of this fails I can just ask you for help.
I can solve my remaining two errors by reading my essay out loud when I think I’m done with it. I can also complete my essay ahead of time then come back the next day

or two and re look at it so I have a fresh pair of eyes while looking at it. I can also use the technique of separating every sentence in an essay and look at it like that rather than.
Next time when I go to write my second essay I can improve upon it by using some of the techniques I discussed earlier to improve my grammar. I think that I did a good job on how I worded everything to let everything flow and like you said I gave a nice road map. I think that I did such a good job on letting the ideas flow because I limited myself on how long I would spend doing the essay then I would come back the next day and just add on not really looking at the grammar of how it was. I feel as if I planned well for it I just needed to go a step further and look at my grammar.
You told me that both of my paragraphs needed to be expanded but I felt as if that was not possible with the given word count. At first it was expanded but when I looked down I had almost 900 words so I had to paraphrase as best I could. I thought that I transitioned everything nicely to let everything flow but I do feel as if I could’ve went into more detail with a specific part of it rather than just giving a generalized view of it.