Mary Kate's Synthesis

1. Mary Kate Lambert “No title was given”. Mary Kate’s paper was unfinished, however, she did provide a good topic sentence for the introduction paragraph. In the second paragraph she needs a much stronger topic sentence. Also, there were grammar errors such as incomplete sentences, capitalization errors, word usage errors, and to be verbs. Overall, I think that she is off to a good start and that her final paper would be better if she includes these suggestions.

2. Jourdan Green “The Literary Impact of Being Born vs. Captured into Slavery”. Jourdan’s paper was unfinished, however, the information she provided in the introduction and second paragraph was great. The grammar errors she had was one run-on sentence and I think if she rephrase

the sentence it would flow much better. I believe once she add more information about Equiano it could make her paper stronger. But, other than that I think that she have a strong introduction paragraph and her argument on Mary Prince is strong.

3. Ore Oluseye “Paper Three”. Ore’s paper was good but there were grammar errors such as heading errors, weak title, rephrase of sentences, word usage errors, misspelling of words, incomplete sentences, and to be verbs. Overall, I think that she could add another paragraph to tide everything together, but other than that I think that she is off to a good start. Also, I think that she can provide evidence from the text to support her argument.

4. Mariah Weinkauf she did not submit her paper by the deadline and I was unable to edit her paper to offer her feedback in the timeframe that was required.

Part Two
1. Name of peers who edited your paper. What did you find most helpful about the assignment? Mary Kate Lambert is the only peer who edited my paper and what I found most helpful about the assignment was the comments she made regarding my paper. It helped me to better explain and clarify one of my arguments in my paper that Mary Kate suggested.