In The Mist Literary Analysis

Thank you, Mr. Sziraky for your submission to Leduc's weekly. Unfortunately, the board of editors decided not to use your story "In The Mist" in the next edition of Leduc's weekly. Although we are not using your story we would like to offer you some advice to help advance the story and also tell you what areas you are strong in. The board would like you to take this advice into consideration.

The board of editors and myself felt that you were very strong in the setting. We enjoyed the context of the setting and how the setting develops around the plot and we encourage you to continue that. We also really enjoyed how metaphorically rich the story was and how it helped in characterization as you told the reader "the dense writhing fog" as it was hard for the boy to see where he was going and he was also in the dense fog mentally. The setting also helped with the situation the family was in and how the fog did not affect them after they got removed from the lorry.

Although we like your setting some other areas are lacking and are making the story hard to relate too. The weakness of your story was the plot. The plot has no substance because you leave the reader "In the mist" as the story progresses. There was no background why the family was on the lorry in

The board thought that you were lacking in characterisation, although you gave well-written descriptions of the people in the lorry the board wants to see more of the family and what they look like and what is their mental state at this time. We suggest you improve on the description of the family by telling the reader how they look (wealthy poor) or you can help the reader by giving a statement on how they are feeling about this situation (happy, sad). However, we enjoyed the description of the people in the lorry and how they look " He and the man in the leather jacket" the board encourages you to continue to further describe the