Describe The Relationship Between Ella And Ruby

I really enjoyed reading your story! I think you did a good job of moving through time in your story. Often, when there are large stretches of time between scenes in a story, I feel jerked around as a reader. However, I think by keeping the setting of the diner the same throughout the story, you were successful in jumping months at a time in order to move your narrative along. I also really liked experiencing the diner during different seasons and at different points in Ella’s life. I felt like I got to really know the tone associated with the setting of the diner, and I got to see Ella and Ruby develop as characters. Nice job!
In comparison with Ella and Ruby, the other characters are fairly flat. I don’t think it is necessary to flush them

all out. Each character seems to serve the purpose of representing the point Ella is at in her relationships with others. Her other dates are a means of revealing Ella’s journey to figuring out what, and who, she wants. However, as I mentioned in one of my margin comments, I do find myself wanting to know more about the past of David and Ella’s relationship. I know this is not the focus of your story. However, it might be effective to add more details about their past relationship throughout. This would satisfy any readers’ questions regarding this area of the story. Moreover, it might playfully sway the reader to think that the end will center around David and Ella, when in reality it is about Ruby and Ella. If done right this type of method could have the potential to really create a credible surprise. Obviously, whether you chose to take the story in that direction or not is up to you as the author. I just thought I would share the idea in case it is helpful.
The only significant critique I have is that I thought the ending of the story, particularly the dialogue of Ruby, was slightly corny. This might be indicative of my personal preference when it comes to romantic interactions between characters, and I still think your story functions as it is currently written. However, if you get other similar comments, you may want to revisit this part of the story.
Overall, I hope my comments are helpful throughout your editing process. You clearly put a lot of thought into your narrative, and I think you did really great work with setting.