A Gift I Couldn T Unwrap Analysis

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After reading your paper, “A Gift I Couldn’t Unwrap,” it’s possible that there are many possible arguments, due to the number of stories in your paper. For example, the argument could be overcoming obstacles through literacy in video games, which is not debatable, or it could be about the process of hard work, which also is not debatable. I recommend that you change your main argument, one possibility is to convince the audience that children should start playing video games and reading manuals at an early age, so that they learn to read, while having fun. This argument is not only discernable, but also debatable. If you were to use this argument, then you would have to omit some of your stories, so that your paper sticks to its argument, which will lead to a flow in the paper. In terms of audience, it seems that it’s directed towards the general population or towards children who need to overcome the same problems you went through. If you were to use the aforementioned argument, then the audience would be parents with young children. …show more content…

You made it easier for the reader to understand by saying, “So in essence, there was a barrier in my way to reaching success, and I had to find a way over it. Many popular stories are based on beating seemingly impossible odds. The challenge always seems immense for the protagonist, but there is always a way to beat it. This is not one of those outrageous adventure stories, but there are aspects that relate them. The protagonist just have to work at it and so did I (3). This could be improved grammatically, but other than that it did a solid job of supporting a part of your purpose of the

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