In-Class Essay Writing Analysis

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When I think back to the time right before we started writing our essay I realize that in order to come up with any ideas for the paper we had to chew on one thought for over ten minutes. For example when I read the sentence that we wrote about fast-paced live of professionals that reside in the city, I remember that just that one sentence took us about fifteen minutes to finally use it on our paper. It seems like we should have done some free-writing before we started this assignment. When we started to write this essay we didn’t have a clear visual on our thesis. We had lots of information that was scattered and had no connection between the Robot, the Jeep and the advertisement that was being talked about. In this essay I included lots of ways we can benefit our in class writing if we were to re-due it.
The good thing about our in-class essay is that we have our visual summary of the robot. Sadly with all that information that we provided I still think that our essay falls in a C to a B- category in the Grading Checklist. The reason for such identification is because we didn’t come up with enough information to provide a clear visual summary. Our summary was way too short and we barely wrote about the Robot. We didn’t talk about the similarities He and the Jeep might have which would greatly increase the size of our essay. Not only that, it would also show our readers exactly what our ad is about and why we chose it. Even if we had only two hours to write our essay that should have given us
plenty of time to write a longer more clear piece of writing if we knew how to structure our essay correctly.
We included some information on the background of the ad but not enough to visualize the exact surrounding of the Robot and...

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...g where it is not safe. This is exactly what the robot is doing, he is skateboarding down an urban road on top of a jeep where it is not safe. This shows me that the Robot is taking a huge risk, he is doing something that is extremely dangerous. “This phase of the exercise should produce an extended and unordered list of details” ( David Rosenwasser and Jill Stephen 35). Using this heuristic I came up with whole bunch of detail that has no order but it contributes to a bigger picture of a visual summary.
If we go back and re-write our in-class essay, using these structured rules that are extremely important, I believe that our essay will be longer than a page. It will include more information about the ad that will give our readers a better understanding of what the ad is trying to tell us. Overall using this strategies I will have the best essay I ever wrote.

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