Strengths Of The Essay: The Impact Of Emotional Abuse

Strengths of the essay:

It’s good that they identified specific effects. For example:

Some of the effects included drug and alcohol use, the feeling of worthlessness, isolation, depression, sleepiness, and suicidal thoughts long after the abuse ended.

The specific effects can help the readers to understand the impact of emotional abuse.

At the moment, the body paragraph focuses mostly on the effects after the abuse. For example:

Numerous victims reported still having persisting effects long after their abuser was gone… For many victims, their awareness of what they had gone through was evident.

it seems that they are supposed to discuss the severity of the abuse both during and after the experience. In that case, it will be better if they also discuss what happens while the abuse is going on. For example, what impact might emotional abuse have on the victim’s self-esteem when the abuse initially starts? What will happen to the victim’s self-esteem as the abuse continues? They could explain that, and they can also consider what can happen to the victim’s relationships, independence, health, etc. as the abuse is ongoing. Discuss the severity that emotional abuse has on victims during the experience.

They don’t have an appropriate thesis statement in the introduction yet. Here’s what they wrote at the end of the

They could keep the above as background information, but they can also add a thesis that presents the central message of the essay so that the readers are better prepared for the body paragraphs. What are the key points that was made about emotional abuse and the victims in the body of the paper? Given those key points, what then is the overall message about the severity of the impact that that emotional abuse has on victims during and after the experience? The thesis can address those questions. For