FAT PITCH is driven by the theme of second chances and respect. The idea of a desperate minister wanting to save the church’s baseball team has merit. Denny’s goal is well defined, and the stakes become very personal. The script poses the moral question of how far one will go to achieve their goal. The idea of a minister “borrowing” money to support his dream is a nice set up for conflict and character growth. With that said, the script would benefit from more development. There are several areas that should be re-examined, including the structure, pace, character development, and tension. First, the script opens up in the world of softball setting the tone for a sports story. However, the overall story type is not clear. It’s not clear …show more content…
The first act sets up the goal for Denny. He needs to prove the team is valuable and/or find a new sponsor. To focus the script more effectively, clearly show how Denny tries to show that the team is a value to the community. While he hires illegals and Sparxx, the script really doesn’t connect this with Denny showing how this is valuable and how it will save the team. It would be different if Denny decides to recruit all juvenile delinquents or alcoholics to show the church and the community that they can contribute to society and help bring the church credibility. However, right now, the structure is too fragmented. Sometimes it’s about Luke, sometimes it’s about Sparxx, and sometimes it’s about the illegal immigrants. Thus, consider that Denny decides that he’ll make a team with the juvenile delinquents and then just focus on how Denny tries to help them. Consider structuring and focusing the script more like the BAD NEWS BEARS, in which Denny tries to help bring a rag-tag team to victory to show the church leaders that they are valuable. He can still “borrow” from the funds to pay for the uniforms and help the team, but it will feel more justifiable and less selfish. At the end, he can make a speech about what he did, that it was wrong, but for the right reasons. While there may be consequences for his actions, the audience still roots for …show more content…
It’s difficult to tell one player from the other. They are all child-like in their actions and their dialogue. A stronger female character needs to be developed. Rain gets lost in the plot and doesn’t stand out. As mentioned, create a potential love interest for Denny. Remember, he has to learn to prioritize family and softball. Another possible story choice is to just focus on the goal of trying to find a new sponsor for the team. The professional presentation needs to be polished. The formatting has several errors. First, there should be no space between the character element and the dialogue. On page 17, the wrong format is used. The parenthetical element is overly used and not properly used. Reduce redundancy of the descriptions. It’s not necessary to describe what they are talking about, just show the scene. For example, on page 10 the narrative explains that they are discussing the fight and there’s no need to explain what they are talking about, as the audience will hear it in the dialogue. On page 55, the narrative explains he forgot to pray first and then he says he forgot. This is redundant. Keep the narrative descriptions lean and to the
With only four characters in the play, each of these individuals plays a vital role in each other’s lives. Gary and Dave are juxtaposing characters in the play, with Christine and Sue-Anne being the other two. Prior to their first meeting, Gary was hardworking and determined, a classic Aussie tradie striving to build a house on a block of land he inherited from his passing father in hopes of providing a future for his unborn baby. Dave however, is quite contrasting in comparison to Gary. Dave is known for being laidback and lazy, playing a passive role. Despite not revealing much about himself, Dave is socializes well with the rest of the characters with c...
Students should read this book in high school to learn how to take a negative situation and make it positive. Hutch is extremely jealous of Darryl because he knows that Darryl is a better baseball player, but he also knows that if he wants his team to win the championship, then he needs to find a way to get along with him. This book does appeal to the interest of most teenage students. Most teenagers have played some type of sport and have had to find a way to deal with being on a team with competition. A team that is not able to work together will not win together. It is important for teammates to suppo...
When Denny’s late wife Eve dies, his whole world is changed. Trish and Maxwell - the evil Twins - plot against Denny by pulling him into a major court battle. As a result, Denny is forced to sacrifice major opportunities in order to win custody of his daughter, Zoë. “ “I appreciate your generous offer,” he [Denny] said. “But I’m afraid certain things prevent me from leaving this country – or even this state – at the moment. So I have to decline.” (Stein 276) Luca Pantoni – a man that worked at Ferrari – asked Denny if he wanted to move out to Italy with his family where he could test cars for a living. With the major court battle going on Denny had to politely refuse the offer. Knowing Denny’s personality it would have been difficult for him to decline such a great offer, but at that moment he had to think about his family first. Next to Eve, Zoë is the most important person in Denny’s life. The death of Eve was unexpected for both Denny and Zoë, but Denny could not let his sadness and frustration show...
Gambling addict Connor O’Neil ends up deep in debt after he borrows money from almost every loan shop in town to fuel his addiction. In order to pay the mounds of money that he owes, he is requested to coach a little-league baseball team, the Kekambas. At first, Connor doesn’t start off right with the kids and doesn’t see the point of him being there. Even though Connor paid the kids no attention, they were somehow inspired by his presence. Later, He realizes that he must come to grips at what he wants in his life, and ultimately forms a special bond with the kids on the team.
Assume you are a screenwriter in the year 2010. You have been commissioned to write a movie script about women's sports and current society. What is the theme? Who are the protagonists? What are the issues and how does the movie end?
It isn’t until the end that Burns begins to present us with the early characters that most baseball fans have come to know of: Ty Cobb, Babe Ruth, and Branch Rickey among them. Still, First Inning manages to be very interesting despite the fact that the narrative is loose and the fact that Burns lacks many of the tools a modern film storyteller would need to effectively enhance the story so that it comes across well on
... then going through her softball career and then ending up seeing her sister again when they are old. Penny, the director, did a good job of incorporating the personal lives of the players into the movie. I thought it was very emotional when Coach Dugan gave one of the players a death notice saying her husband died in the war. It helped make the movie a little bit more personal and real. I really enjoyed this movie and I could watch it any day of the weak.
As I open my door and put my Ray Ban sunglasses on, I see a group of young boys standing on the field. The boys are dressed in white pants with blue stripes and orange shirts saying "Southern Bank of Commerce Mets." I stood in front of those young ballplayers and said, "Do y'all know why I am here?" One of the kids said, "No, why?" Your Coach Cook has asked me to come and speak to you about the importance of practicing the fundamentals of baseball.
Ring, Jennifer (2009). Stolen bases: Why american girls don’t play baseball. Chicago Il: University of Illinois Press.
Schemas, the mental structures that we use to organize information around us, were predominate in the movie (Aronson, Wilson & Akert, 2013). The schema of what a professional baseball payer looked like was not what was around to play. All the men were off fighting the war so when the women started playing they did not fit the schema of what most people saw as a baseball player (Marshall, 1992).
This is an ensemble drama that addresses the effects of downsizing on the upper class American family. For high flying Bobby Walker, his job at GTX has given him the American Dream: a big house in the city suburbs, a silver Porsche and a beautiful family. But when Bobby is one of the many laid off by the company in the wake of an ongoing economic recession, he must join the lines of the unemployed, but also deal with the effects it has on him and his family.
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The movie being analyzed is the Sandlot. The relationship between the two main characters is a friendship, which begins with one boy who is desperate for friends and another who is searching for The Sandlot’s last teammate. The friendship between Benny and Small’s is an accurate depiction of the development of friendship in real life. In the movie, Scotty Smalls (Smalls) moves to a new neighborhood. One of his new neighbors happens to be the best baseball player in the neighborhood, Benny, who eventually teaches Smalls how to catch and throw so that the team has a ninth player. What begins as filling a baseball position eventually leads to a strong bond between the two main characters. Throughout the summer, the team plays baseball, goes swimming, plays baseball, goes to the fair, and plays baseball. A dog known as “The Beast” lives behind the fence of The Sandlot. The Beast is said to have eaten every baseball and person that has ever been on the other side of that fence, so when the boys hit Small’s stepfather’s signed baseball over the fence, they have to come together to retrieve the baseball. In the movie The Sandlot, directed by David M. Evans, the development of the friendship between Scott Smalls and Benjamin Franklin Rodriguez is conveyed through their communication. The Sandlot shows the progression of a friendship and the importance of communication to help a friendship flourish.
The movie I decided to analyze was Remember the Titans. I examined the dilemmas and ethical choices that were displayed throughout the story. In the early 1970s, two schools in Alexandria Virginia integrate forming T.C. Williams High School. The Caucasian head coach of the Titans is replaced by an African American coach (Denzel Washington) from North Carolina, which causes a fury among white parents and students. Tensions arise quickly among the players and throughout the community when players of different races are forced together on the same football team. Coach Boone is a great example of a leader. He knows he faces a tough year of teaching his hated team. But, instead of listening to the hating town or administrators, Boone pushes his team to their limits and forces good relationships between players, regardless of race. His vision for the team involves getting the players concerned in what the team needs to become, and not what it is supposed to be; a waste. Boone is a convincing leader with a brutal, boot camp approach to coaching. He believes in making the players re-build themselves as a team. When Boone says, You will wear a jacket, shirt, and tie. If you don't have one buy one, can't afford one then borrow one from your old man, if you don't have an old man, then find a drunk, trade him for his. It showed that he was a handy Craftsman and wanted done what he wanted done no matter what it took.During training camp, Boone pairs black players with white players and instructs them to learn about each other. This idea is met with a lot of fighting, but black linebacker Julius Campbell and stubborn white All-American Gerry Bertier. It was difficult for the players to cope with the fact they had to play with and compete with ...
‘Field of Dreams’ is a diversified script that constantly evolves, but mainly revolves around the game of baseball, ‘the greatest game ever invented’. The game that according to some avid spectators, completely and thoroughly transcends and binds the country to past, present, and future--generation to generation. In this movie this national pastime represents an avenue that finds the connection to the soul of a great audience; somehow insinuating that baseball acts as a means of fulfilling individual spiritual needs. These needs are that of a ‘sense of belonging’, a need to participate in sport, either vicariously as a spectator or directly as a participant. Moreover the desire to engage in distraction and play may be intrinsic to the human psyche. The theme throughout the movie was based on the legendary story of the Chicago White Sox of 1919, where the question was raised on the issue of the team’s “sportsmanship” and the ethical behavior of several teammates during the World Series. This left the image of America’s most idolized team tarnished and lead up to a ban of eight players from the sport; for an ‘unsportsmanlike’ like conduct in the series. The public view of the game up until then was that of perfection, it was clean and straight; but afterwards, the lack of fair play especially coming from such highly ranked players, ended up affecting fans’ enthusiasm for the entire sport. As the movie nears its ending, Robinson evolved on the concept of having utterly devoted fans and as if in a mystified manner drew them in to this already mystical place, just to have them see the most idolized team of ‘the golden age’ play once again.