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Literature and humans
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Assessment Item Three Critique
Manuscript Title: 5D
Author of the primary work: Matthew Nichols
Student who is critiquing the manuscript: Sean West
Synopsis:
This story follows James, a journalist too curious for his own good, and his quest to discover the secrets that lay within a cult. People have been going missing, fleeing their families and homes to join this new and sinister revolution. Our Earth is one of many. There are others for each of the five dimensions, and perhaps even more. The Archdeacon has James in his possession and is about to show him a world he could never have imagined in all of his wildest dreams…or wildest nightmares. There, he is greeted by a warped humanoid race called the Jaie (or Angels). These creatures, thought
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Each seem quite balanced to each other. There isn’t too much exposition to bog down the flow of the writing. However, I do feel like there is a point at which the dialogue in the exposition becomes quite clunky (Refer to Mechanics section). The description of the settings and characters could be tweaked and improved, so as to enhance the sinister and supernatural elements of the story. I feel this would really increase the quality of the writing and heighten the interest of the reader. The writer’s style is very science-fiction/fantasy-based, which suits the piece very well. This is clearly a genre the writer feels comfortable writing in. He has chosen to attempt world building in this story and I think, for the most part, he pulls it off quite well. The point of view established is third person past tense. I think perhaps playing with first person present tense could give the piece a new spin and make the tension more immediate. But this is ultimately up to the author and not me. The chosen point of view is maintained well throughout and doesn’t lapse into any …show more content…
• “Ill” to I’ll” no, I’d actually change it to “We’ll show you” –much, much creepier, as if “they” have been listening the entire time, less hopeful tone, turns out to be much darker
Publication:
I think there is a fair amount of work to do before this work would be suitable for publication. But the core structure and voice of the story is definitely interesting and engaging. I’d stick with it, sort out the mechanical errors and trim the prose to a concise, hard-hitting final copy. I enjoyed reading editing this story very
The story itself was quite interesting. The characters are believable and some had obvious arcs, the plot seems well paced, and most plot points are memorable. The dialogue didn’t seem forced, and flowed fairly realistically. The conflict, Devine Corporations vs the Beanfield (well, really, it’s owner but…), ended well, with Devine not being able to do anything about it, not for a lack of trying. Overall, the story was fairly interesting. The oldest man in their town’s whole story was, in particular, quite interesting. I’m still wondering about a few things, specifically to do with the illusion/ghost/whatever the old guy kept speaking with. That whole plot point both confuses and intrigues me. The only problem I have with the story is the student who came to work on a thesis paper. His whole character and insert into the story just seemed forced. He truly wasn't
In this report I will discuss different solutions for PVMS to help them improve network communications between the stores and head office, and centralize procedures for recording stock. This report will list the advantage and the disadvantage of each one.
I would recommend this story to anyone who enjoys stories centered on the maturation of youth during their teenage years. I felt that the climax of this story was not as exciting as it could have been. However, the storyline was very interesting as well as entertaining. I look forward to reading other stories by this author!
Overall, I didn’t enjoy reading this story very much. All the narrative style writing and the lengthy sentences made for a boring, slow story.
I do believe this was well written story. I will readily admit, I am not the brightest when it comes to genres. Whether it be in literature or music, I just kind of go with what I like. So, I do apologize if the genre labels I use are incorrect. I feel like this story falls into the psychological thriller genre, and of course the horror genre. I would recommend this story to anybody who is not bothered by graphic imagery. Also, I do not think I would call it old English, but the story is definitely presented in a much more fancy style. If you like that, then this story if for you.
In truth, and overall, I cannot say that I am very satisfied with my improvements to my ASL this semester. I think I had high expectations coming into the semester, and they were difficult in being realized. One biggest area that needs improvement is the fluency in my signing, especially concerning English mouthing. I am obviously not at all satisfied in this area. This area is one of a great mystery to me, because I have not had that much issues with English mouthing in ASL I. For example, in VJ#3 for ASL I, I did not mouth many words. I guess picking up this habit this semester or maybe not addressing the formation of this habit and being able to ignore it was due to the increase in difficulty and complexity of what was required in ASL II. Additionally, it could be because the videos for this class were done with a partner while the video journals for ASL were done by myself. I think that having an additional person, having to coordinate what we are siging, as well as having much longer notes and requirements made me have to think a lot to produce my sings. They were not the simple, “I have 2 brothers and 2 sisters” kinds of sentences. I tend to mouth more when I have to think about what I have to say. This issue is most evident in my first video journal for ASL II, where I literally mouth every word. Although it got a bit better for the second one, the habit and issue still persists as evidenced my the feedback I received from the professor. I think what hindered my improvement was actually lack of practice. Not just lack of practice, but specifically lack of practice signing with other students about topics that were not precisely covered in class. I needed more practice on spontaneity; my mastery of the...
I have trained for the past four years to gain muscle mass so that I can enter bodybuilding competitions and win them. I have not entered any competition yet but I will be competing when my body-weight reaches 80kg, 10% body fat. But right now the goal is to gain muscle mass. It has been really tough eating clean and working hard in the gym day-in day-out. Initially, it was difficult to figure out what foods to eat and what was good for my digestive system and how many calories I was consuming each day. I ignored this tracking process for the first two years but after reading articles on the internet about the importance of tracking my workouts as well as my daily Macronutrient intake, I started the tracking process. This process really helped me in knowing my body.
Our Session Long Project (SLP) for Module 1 transforms the evaluation essay into a job evaluation. The type of job evaluation used in this SLP identifies the responsibilities of the job and bases the individual’s performance on these responsibilities. What does this mean to the employee; it means that if they understand the responsibilities of their job they are better able to perform it to the satisfaction of the evaluator. However employees who are not informed of their responsibilities can invalidate your evaluation process very quickly and wreck havoc in any organization.
Everyone has its strength and weaknesses, it can see from when the exam is around the corner. Some students will prepare early but some are not.
The book and the movie were both very good. The book took time to explain things like setting, people’s emotions, people’s traits, and important background information. There was no time for these explanations the movie. The book, however, had parts in the beginning where some readers could become flustered.
For this paper I will break down the following argument in terms of validity and soundness:
As a human in this world, we cannot deny that we cannot live without others people’s help. Even if we have lot of capabilities, we still need other peers to live each other despite there are some positives or negatives that come to us. In order to make sure that continue as clearly as possible, we have to know there are some guidelines and rules which human should to know and act based on that particular laws. These guidelines explain to us as an action that we should adopt it to live with everyone in our daily lives.
The purpose of this study was to determine the effectiveness of Kindergarten Peer-Assisted Learning Strategies (K-PALS) for students with disabilities. Additionally it looked to see if there was a correlation between the amount of training the teacher received and the students’ success. The team of authors used a variety of statistical methods to determine the effectiveness in both of these areas. A random group of 89 kindergartners, from 47 different classrooms in Minnesota schools all with individualized education programs, were divided into three different test groups. These groups were control, K-PALS Level 1, and K-PALS Level 2. The study concluded that the K-PALS students outperformed the control group on alphabetic and oral reading measures.
Identify the letter of the choice that best completes the statement or answers the question.
The main purpose of this study was to examine how a blue petrel’s olfactory system works and to see whether the system they use is observed in other bird species. These researchers wanted to determine if they could propose a possible pattern for olfactory systems. These systems assist in chemical communication of kinship recognition and mate selection. Some of the methodological concerns the researchers had were the constraints of chemical analysis in the field and the difficulty of conducting field behavioral experiments. To overcome the methodological concerns they saw, the researchers decided to use mice instead of the blue petrel species. One of the main reasons that the researchers chose mice was because they hypothesized that petrels have a similar olfactory system to mice. This system enables mice to pick up non-personal scents and to recognize their mate’s odor. Researchers also chose to use mice because the petrels do not reach the age of first breeding until they are seven to nine years old which means it would take years to collect a large enough sample size. Petrels are monogamous partners and only have one chick per year. Mice breed quickly so it is easier to collect large sample sizes. In this experiment, however, there sample sizes are on the small side. At first, I questioned why they used mice instead of petrels but after reading their argument it seems that they are first testing whether chemical signaling occurs that there are chemical signals assisting in the process. However, this means that the findings they report on are not ecologically realistic.